So, as discussed in the Uncompetitive decks thread, I'm continuing to have good success with my rough take on this idea on jinteki.net (I know, I know). I also cut the Green Levels after one game, and it currently is SEA Source for the alternative win condition.
The other alternative I've got in there, that may come out, is Punitive Counterstrike. It matches quite neatly with the Hollywood Renovation plan, because if they do manage to steal it, then you can maybe sneak out the flatline win. It also has potential if they steal a Hollywood Renovation from a central, because if you've not scored it yet it likely means that you've drawn into the other cards in your deck, namely economy and kill cards. All that said - I haven't pulled it off in my handful of games yet, so it may just be wishful thinking. The other obvious issue is that it requires a money advantage, which so far hasn't been a problem, but it's jinteki.net and runners haven't been forcing nearly as many rezzes as they should so my perception is likely way off. They will probably get cut.
The big difference in my take is that I've gone for 2 Caprice, 1 Biotic Labor. I really like the Biotic for either scoring the first Atlas from hand if you're not getting your rush pieces, or better yet, for closing out the game after you pull off the combo, with the Atlas token fetching whichever you need out of Biotic and Atlas.
I've been leaning heavily on the Hostiles for economy, but it doesn't feel bad at all. I'm happy to score two of them for net 10 credits (not counting Mark Yale, who I also have as a one of for the same reason as you), putting me onto game point and into Restructure range. I've also got Fracking in place of Oaktown, but I haven't once tried to score it yet.